Poems By Fastfreta
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Why Poetry
I am so completely blocked, I mean I have writers block, so I decided to put a few of my poems out to the world. Now I don't claim to be a poet, I actually wrote these a few months ago in an instant of boredom. Please don't be too critical. I just wanted to keep the juices flowing, and not let too much time go by without publishing something.
These poems have nothing to do with my personal feelings, they just what came to mind when I was thinking of what to write at the time.
I actually know nothing about poetry, so I don't even know what kind of poetry this is suppose to be.
My Attempt At Poetry
Where Were You When
Where were you when I cried, you were not there to dry my tears
Where you when I laughed, you were not there to share my joy
Where were you when I fell down, you were not there to lift me up
Where were you when I stood up, you were not there to cheer me on
Where were you when I lost, you were not there to encourage me
Where were you when I won, you were not there to congratulate me
Where were you when they all left, you were not there to fill the void
Where were you when everyone was there, you were not in the crowd
Where were you when I was sad, you were not there to comfort me
Where were you when I was happy, you were not there to share my delight
Where were you when I was in danger, you were not there to protect me
Where were you when I was safe, you were not there to share the feeling.
Where were you when I failed, you were not there to give me hope
Where were you when I succeeded, you were not there to share in my success
Where were you when I was ill, you were not there to rub my head
Where you when I was well, you were not there to dance with me
Where were you
It doesn't matter you are here now
A POEM BY
ALFRETA ‘FASTFRETA’ SAILOR ©
You Were There
You were there to calm my fears
You were there to wipe my tears
You were there to help me cope
You were there to give me hope
You were there to give me power
You were there in my darkest hour
You were there to make me smile
You were there all the while
You were there to hold my head
You were there when I to thee wed
You were there when sadness I did see
You were there to comfort me
You were there when I was glad
You were there when times were bad
You were there when times were good
You were there when you felt you should
You were there when the day was bright
You were there when I could see no light
You were always there
Where are you now
A Poem by
Alfreta ‘fastfreta’ Sailor ©
You Are Mine
You are mine, all the way
You are mine, no matter what they say
You are mine, I want to hold you near
You are mine, have no fear
You are mine, with every move I make
You are mine with every breath I take
Your are mine, didn't you know
You are mine, please don’t go
You are mine, let’s not delay
You are mine, let’s seize the day
You are mine, what can I say to you
You are mine, just say I do
A Poem by Alfreta "fastfreta" Sailor ©
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I'm no poet either but for you claiming not to be one they sure turned out pretty nice. Good work.
These are pretty good poems!
Wow, beautiful peotry hub Fastfreta, not bad all. Godspeed. creativeone59
Very thoughful and inspiring poems. Thank you.
I'm not a poet either fastfreta, but I enjoyed what you shared with us! Way to go - you are very brave to step into uncharted territory and share your experience with the world.
My favorite was "Where Were You When"
dearest fastfreta, I'm no poet either but in my opinion anything written that expresses how one feels is poetry and indeed this was. I think they were arranged beautifully and flowed the way they were supposed to. It is interesting to see the order in which you placed the poems. Reminds me of the rollercoaster of relationships we go through. I think it ended on a hopeful note. You have a beautiful soul and all of your writings reflect that, even if it is just showing the many uses of aluminum foil. You shine just as brightly. I absolutely love the painting. Who did it?.......your loyal fan, Lisa
Your poems tell me that you have had a wonderful full, rich and blessed life :) You have been LOVED.
I would differ with you, my dear. You are a poet of the best kind -- a poet of the heart that's lived and survived. I'll enjoy reading your poetry any time the muse strikes you. Best, Sis
I agree wholeheartedly with Angela-these words spoke volumes to me.
Please offer some more!
And by the way, I admire your courage-I've felt 'poems'in my mind and have never written them down.
Laurel
Thank you alekhouse, I don't quite know what you mean, but I'm going to look up poetry on the Internet and follow your advice. Your critique is appreciated
Thank you Bail Up, khood, creativeone59, Hello, hello, Veronica Allen, lisapreston, theawwbutmom, Angela, lorlie6 all for your votes of confidence.
Thank you all for your inspiration. About writing more umm, I don't know.
I say the same as Sis. Anything that comes from the heart if good.
Thanks
Thank you Ictodd1947 for the encouragement. Glad to see you again.
Hi fasfreta,
Your poetry turned out well! If only you have the time to read these poems in a poetry reading session with the feelings that you had when you wrote them and when you read them, then you will realize that you have indeed written a poem. Please keep writing a poem, fasfreta, not just as a deterrent to writers' block but as a part of your writing life. I believe there is poetry in your system. Good luck!
Thank you franciaonline, for your inspiration and encouragement. I will consider writing more, but now I must first get over this writers block. Thanks again for reading. See you soon.
Very nice Fastfreta. Encore! Encore!
Thanks Micky Dee, You're sweet, I don't know about the encore. Although, I do appreciate everyone's vote of confidence.
I am no poet but I think your poems are great. I think poems are ones expressions of intimate and inner feelings and that is why is takes courage to share them. I felt the same when I published a poem on how I was feeling about midlife. Thanks for sharing.
Fastfreta, I liked your poems. God hub.
These poems are wonderful! If I had to classify, I would say the first one is more prose, you have that lyrical, rhythmic flow in it; it's my favorite, by the way. The others follow a basic rhyme scheme. You did a fabulous job!
An admirable attempt, fastfreta. I'm in agreement with alekhouse. Try to break up the monotony of repeating lines. Go one line at a time--with and without rhyming. Thanks so much for the effort and keep on writing!
Thank you all for weighing in on these my first attempt at poetry. I can't say that I have the fever for this form of expression, so I'm not too sure I'll do it again, but who knows, if the mood strikes me maybe, umm.
Thank you so much dohn121, It's advice like yours and alekhouse that's invaluable to me when I venture into the unknown. But I don't think I'll be venturing again too soon, LOL.
Thank you msannec for identifying this for me, as I stated before I am clueless as to what I wrote.
Thanks Pamela99 and uliveulearn for your kind expressions.
Again thank you all, you're too kind.
Have you thought of having some of these put to music? :-)
How ironic that you said that, I had a friend that sings, tell me that one in particular sounded like a song. She even demonstrated how it would sound. Umm, don't give me any ideas. Hey singers out there, hear that. LOL! Thanks for that De Greek.
I thought your poem was quite nice for the first time. How brave...way to go.
Thank you pmccray, you're too kind. Thanks for stopping, see you soon.
Of course, these are pretty good poems - I liked them, keep writing...
Thank you Moulik Mistry for your vote of confidence. Thank you for stopping hope to see you again.
Beautiful Poems Fastfreta.
It's nice to see this side of you. I enjoyed them.
Best Wishes. :)
Oh, hello there Lady_E, thank you for your kind comment as usual. See you soon.
Where were you when was beautiful. I was feeling so bad, it was so sad and desolate. But that last line just slaps you in the face with forgiveness, what a wonderful concept, and a lesson in poetry.
Thank you Dolores, You inspire me, considering I didn't really know what I was doing, that is quite a compliment, I am honored. Thank you again.
I agree with alekhouse when it comes to the first verse. The other ones are laid out nicely, I think. Good job for a self-professed beginning poet! Repetition is a valuable tool in the poet's work book and you use it very well in all three of these lovely verses.
By the way, that picture is beautiful! Where did you get it?
Thank you ultimateshazaam, You mean I accidentally really wrote poetry, (smile). I just might give it another try, but work on the suggestions given. Thanks for the critique. About the picture, I got it from a Free Photo site, can't remember which.
Tis a poet you are Fastfreta! A poet of the true kind who writes from her heart with truth and honesty, courageously penning and sharing with the world. You've written fabuously! Thank you for sharing these wonderful poems. I really enjoyed them! Keep them coming! xx
I liked them all, your emotion is truly felt through your words. I've posted a poem a while back, and don't claim to be a poet myself, but I think think there's something theraputic about throwing yourself out there in you own words "artistically" =) I say keep it up! I'm glad you shared them.
Oh my goodness Beth and cheryl you both are so inspiring and encouraging. I'm almost sorry that I wrote these because now I set the bar too high for myself. Of course I know I have a long way to go to be a stellar poet, I think now I need to explore that aspect of my personality. Thanks to you both for the encouragement.
Fastfreta, you have set no bar. That's the beauty of poetry. You write as you feel, expressing emotions that are yours. You've done a splendid job of writing your first ones. Keep going, be relaxed about it and the words will flow right through your pen to paper. (BTW, a huge hug for you today!!!) ((HUGS))
Thank you Beth, you're too sweet. I am truly going to try. And HUGS to you too. Have a beautiful day.
This is truly poetry, words from the heart and soul, I loved them. They are moving, insightful and deep....and that's writers block...I should have such a block! will be checking back soon.
Thank you so much Gigi2, for the encouragement. I'm humbled by my hubbing friends opinion of my attempts of poetry. I am encouraged to give it another try. Thank you again, see you soon.
i rather enjoyed what you wrote but the first thing that came to mind when i read them is that they read as a song....ever thought about reading or singing them to music.......thx 4 share
Thank you loveofnight for the compliment. I've been told that before, if I knew how to do that I would. Thanks for stopping, hope to see you soon.
Beautiful, I wish I had someone here to wipe my tears
Aw, go on 3cardmonte, thank you. Please stop again.
...I don't know but I like the twists in the end.. :) thank you ma'am for sharing!.. really cool! :)
Thank you very much pinkhawk, I'm glad you liked them, and thank you for stopping, please come back again.
Just loved it, you have a gift and I am enjoying it! My best to you!
Thank you Ladybird33 for your encouraging comment. Hope to see you soon.
I love thoughts. Naturally we can not live without them. Keen mind you have. I miss the Pink Panther, when detective Closeau referred to girl scouts as punks. God Bless You.
Thanks stars439 for stopping and your kind words. Please stop by again.
Liked these; they were interesting. The first and second seemed somehow related, but I couldn't be sure.
You're right valeria they are related. Thanks for noticing. And thanks for stopping, see you soon.
what beautiful poetry!!!!!! :D I wish i could write like that :)
You're too kind Alyssa. Thanks for the wonderful comment. See you soon.
Girl, that wasn't an attempt at poetry, that was poetry!
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thanks
kimberly
Thank you Kim you are sweet. I'm finally back on HubPages. My laptop crashed while on vacation. I'm home now and on my desktop. Glad to be back.
I love poetry. Your poems are good. You should go to a poetry reading. You would do well there. They are so much fun and you can brain storm with other poets.
Thanks for sharing. I want to read more. Teresa
Sounds like a poet to me! I like it! keep it up. They could be develop in the lyrics for songs. It's in you! Thanks for sharing.
Well thank you Jisblessed, actually I've been told that before, nothing so far. Thanks for stopping, please come back.
alekhouse Level 4 Commenter 2 years ago
Nice try, Freta. If I could just make a suggestion: You might try putting your poems in verses and arranging the lines so they scan. It would give them rhythm and help them to flow and rhyme more interestingly...just my humble opinion. Good job. Keep it up.
I love the painting at the top of the page.